The legend of the ice phoenix (Competition entry)

[Kelsea]

Here is my entry.It is a romance story .You have been warned.

Somewhere in the high mountains where the snow was colder than any snow on the world there lived a Ice Phoenix.She was living lonely here in her nest made from frozen sticks finded on the mountains,here no living creature could live here unless it was made of pure ice.She was rarely going down from the mountaini to hunt food for her.

One day she was seeing a sparkling light moving "could it be another Ice Phoenix?" she asked herself.Gently flapping her wings the Ice Phoenix got into the air following the sparkling light how it was moving in circles.

She got higher in the air shouting at anything it could be there "please stop!".Her wings couldn't flap anymore,she was tired from all this flight.Letting herself fall she was aproaching the ground faster and faster knowing she would probably die.Suddenly she felt soemthing grabbing her neck not letting her fall.She opened her eyes and seen another Ice Phoenix.

Slowly aproaching the ground she asked him "Why you saved me?"."You don't think i would stay in the air and watch you fall,silly"."Thank you,then" she said.She didn't talk to anyone for years so she wasn't used to talk to a Ice Phoenix either."Why you live lonely here?" he asked."All my parents died hunted by killers" she responded starting to cry whit blue crystal tears.

"Don't cry,i am here" he said putting his wings around her like protecting something .She couldn't help but smile and put her arms around the graceful Ice Phoenix like thanking him for being here.

Now that was long.Hope you all like it ^^ now ill go read other entries

[Snj915]

AWESOME thats SO COOL!!!!

[Kelsea]

Why thank you,i like creating storys about creatures from sites ^^ i would make another one but i think im allowed only one entry

[Morgaln]

You can enter as often as you like. If you want to post more, go ahead!

[Kelsea]

Yaaay more thing to do for me ! xD now thats what i like to do : write stories

[Kelsea]

You tell wrong if a ideea pops up my mind i just simply have to write it

[Kelsea]

Maybe a little bit,the entry was hard.But the rest worked itself out ^^

[Kelsea]

half-right

[WinterRaven]

Nice job
You have some spelling errors, but other than that, it's nice :]
Except..."Why you live lonely here?" <-- I don't think that's a sentence

[Kelsea]

Ill edit it ,and english isn't my first language :tard: