How the gryphons Came to be and

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I just thought i should say your help is appreciated but I want a comment on the Story not on Grammar and puncuation
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can someone please comment on the story? :t-corner:
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The story that can't be read for the grammar?
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???
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It is difficult to read the story and make any sense of it because the grammar is so mangled. We can't respond to the story if we can't read it.
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Morgaln wrote:Please put in some interpunctation and paragraphs. Without any pauses, this is extremely hard to read.

I agree with Morgaln hard to read and without pauses....
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Your sentences are like paragraphs,
Very hard to read indeed
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you know please don't comment
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